tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post6018429788149377989..comments2016-11-03T16:24:00.387-07:00Comments on poem.: call for poemsUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-25291635702743377712008-03-20T06:03:00.000-07:002008-03-20T06:03:00.000-07:00Hi Ely, I wish I were shy :-) -Hi Ely, <BR/><BR/>I wish I were shy :-) <BR/>-ren powell https://www.blogger.com/profile/15593358547415514500noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-8444577087833084162008-03-19T19:00:00.000-07:002008-03-19T19:00:00.000-07:00what a moment to capture... i am thinking it was m...what a moment to capture... i am thinking it was more a right of passage for the mother and father than the child,, and that was a brilliant take....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-5606160395585076922008-03-19T14:45:00.000-07:002008-03-19T14:45:00.000-07:00i'm enjoying reading everyone's work this month! m...i'm enjoying reading everyone's work this month! my apologies for not writing on my own prompt but with my mom sick my own energies are drained. it's a strange waiting place. i have been writing some but no patience to pull poems out of it! funny, this is a rite of passage that i'm living, having a sick parent, and i feel too young to be in it. there'll be a rite of passage poem at some point for sure!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-88220445492589578442008-03-19T13:36:00.000-07:002008-03-19T13:36:00.000-07:00from Ely - I'm so glad you enjoyed my lil poem! By...from Ely - I'm so glad you enjoyed my lil poem! By the way, ren.kat, I have a hard time posting my poems too. I actually debated about posting this one, since I'm very shy. Sometimes, though, I find I need other's opinions to help me polish and grow as a poet. <BR/>Thanks again!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-72337194916148993412008-03-19T10:00:00.000-07:002008-03-19T10:00:00.000-07:00from Therese--I think that Ely's haircut poem is b...from Therese--I think that Ely's haircut poem is beautifully done. It's filled with tenderness. The details are evocative, even for those of us outside his heritage. I think the most effortless (seeming so to the reader) and delicate passage is the "comma of silk threads" passage. It's the heart of the poem, the luminosity. The word "unthinking" is perfect. A comma indicates a pause; likewise, this moment is a transition in the life of the entire family.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-30927620720627122352008-03-19T09:00:00.000-07:002008-03-19T09:00:00.000-07:00I wonder if anyone else hesitates to put poems on ...I wonder if anyone else hesitates to put poems on blogs? I am not that prolific and when I have a prompt that stimulates me, I usually want to polish and send it out. . . I liked this a lot! Crud.ren powell https://www.blogger.com/profile/15593358547415514500noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-83797821409908932792008-03-19T07:07:00.000-07:002008-03-19T07:07:00.000-07:00Hi, everyone. Here's my attempt at at rite of pass...Hi, everyone. Here's my attempt at at rite of passage poem. Hope you like it. Ely<BR/><BR/>First Year<BR/><BR/>It has to be Daddy<BR/>who takes him the first time.<BR/>After his first year,<BR/>thin curls downy soft <BR/>all over his collars.<BR/><BR/>She goes along too.<BR/><BR/>At the first snip,<BR/>the first bite of those<BR/>sharp silver jaws,<BR/>she reaches forward,<BR/>unthinking,<BR/>for that comma of <BR/>silk threads,<BR/>touched with sun,<BR/>light against the linoleum.<BR/>She wishes she’d tied <BR/>a strip of soft thin leather<BR/>around it, <BR/>like the one capturing her<BR/>thick dark hair <BR/>like a thundercloud at noon,<BR/>so it would rest safe<BR/>against her clavicle on the way home;<BR/>instead, her palm curls over it,<BR/>mimicking the shape<BR/>of her son’s first cut curl.<BR/><BR/>E. C.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-88490110787710928122008-03-17T17:17:00.000-07:002008-03-17T17:17:00.000-07:00mine is cultural specific to the only culture with...mine is cultural specific to the only culture with which i can be specific first hand,, <A HREF="http://justpaisley.why-paisley.com/?p=476" REL="nofollow">white bread</A> american.....<BR/><BR/>i did enjoy this write very much....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7765970379462364539.post-65990341552081374552008-03-17T07:36:00.000-07:002008-03-17T07:36:00.000-07:00(I'm reposting this for Therese)from Therese--Hi, ...(I'm reposting this for Therese)<BR/><BR/>from Therese--Hi, poets. Today is the twenty-seventh anniversary of my father's burial. So I wrote a poem about that moment in my life, which I consider to have been a rite of passage. I don't have a private blog on which to post the poem, so if you would like to read it, send me an email and I'll send you the poem. My email address is: theresebroderick@yahoo.comjillypoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14951224240914478371noreply@blogger.com